And if that weren’t bad enough you start off with a “Mum” deliberately causing a ridiculous situation which would NEVER happen, not at that age at least. Guy, you really need to learn English before you try to write another story. Indian XXX 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-02-27 21:13:36shame on you this sucks not even a first draft is this bad get a good editor and do a rewrite
remove the intro it is illegal to advertise other web sites here so remove it or go to jail for spammingAnonymous readerReport 2009-06-03 01:28:01be goof if you write abit better and no codes in the story ectREADERReport 2006-06-26 02:38:25UGHHHH ! Okay, you imagination does work so you just need to learn to control it and learn enough English so that we in the USofA can read it without puking!READERReport 2006-06-16 19:19:03kim is a girls name rightREADERReport 2006-03-05 12:45:142/10, english maybe the hardest language to learn, but i know toddlers that speak better than this. FuzzynutZ«12» And if that weren’t bad enough you start off with a “Mum” deliberately causing a ridiculous situation which would NEVER happen, not at that age at least. And if that weren’t bad enough you start off with a “Mum” deliberately causing a ridiculous situation which would NEVER happen, not at that age at least. And if that weren’t bad enough you start off with a “Mum” deliberately
