The big thing for me was the grammar – it’s extremely distracting when you constantly switch between “is” and “was” – try proofreading next time. It doesn’t take long.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-09 21:56:29″it’s not cheating if your in a different area code”
WTF?!?!«12» It doesn’t take long.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-09 21:56:29″it’s not cheating if your in a different area code”
WTF?!?!«12» 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-07-10 23:54:57More detail on the sex and hav someone else proofread it too cuz honestly this story sucksanonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:29VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:03VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-10 04:35:55The story itself has some potential, aside from your neglecting of details. Indian xxx hd 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-07-10 23:54:57More detail on the sex and hav someone else proofread it too cuz honestly this story sucksanonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:29VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:03VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-10 04:35:55The story itself has some potential, aside from your neglecting of details. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-07-10 23:54:57More detail on the sex and hav someone else proofread it too cuz honestly this story sucksanonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:29VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-27 10:08:03VW bug/antifreeze???anonymous readerReport 2011-05-10 04:35:55The story itself has some potential, aside from your neglecting of details. It doesn’t take long.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-09 21:56:29″it’s not cheating if your in a different area code”
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