There are many spelling errors and the dialogue is rather stilted in several places. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 02:02:45Are you a native speaker of English? Indian xxx video Please get some!anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 08:37:42Reading your story is difficult please get an editor/ghost reader before posting to help you form sentences into paragraphs. great idea thouanonymous readerReport 2011-06-28 05:58:03ThereÂ’s a secert about your post. ICTYBTIHTKYanonymous readerReport 2011-06-18 12:29:27good story want moreanonymous readerReport 2011-06-11 09:52:43I gave the story a positive rating, but you sure could use a good editor. ICTYBTIHTKYanonymous readerReport 2011-06-18 12:29:27good story want moreanonymous readerReport 2011-06-11 09:52:43I gave the story a positive rating, but you sure could use a good editor. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 02:02:45Are you a native speaker of English? Please get some!anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 08:37:42Reading your story is difficult please get an editor/ghost reader before posting to help you form sentences into paragraphs. The story is a good on, though, so keep writing.«1» ICTYBTIHTKYanonymous readerReport 2011-06-18 12:29:27good story want moreanonymous readerReport 2011-06-11 09:52:43I gave the story a positive rating, but you sure could use a good editor. There are many spelling errors and the dialogue is rather stilted in several places. Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help.
