Maybe a wee bit too short and it needs a little more detail.«1» This story did nothing for me. People who don’t edit their stories before posting them are assuming that their audience are as moronic and sloppy as what they are. Indian xxx hd 3/10 only because you wrote a story and were able to separate your thoughts into paragraphs. Who browses girly magazines where half the pictures are out of focus ? This story did nothing for me. Try to be a little more vivid when you write. A story is supposed to create a picture, until you barely realize you’re reading anymore and you feel like you’re there, watching what’s going on. 3/10 only because you wrote a story and were able to separate your thoughts into paragraphs. People who don’t edit their stories before posting them are assuming that their audience are as moronic and sloppy as what they are. I agree with those people… 4 comments«1»READERReport 2004-07-17 23:39:27Where is the elaboration? The spelling and grammar are an insult to my intelligence. The spelling and grammar are an insult to my intelligence. Try to be a little more vivid when you write. Maybe a wee bit too short and it needs a little more detail.«1»
