13 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2016-11-20 09:09:08Why dnt you finish the story you started in 2010FalconeroReport 2012-10-16 14:29:40Also, will there actually be a next part? You posted a new story a week ago after not writing anything for a year.Msterchief09Report 2011-04-07 20:46:56You switch between 3rd and 1st person all the time…kind of ruins itanonymous readerReport 2011-02-28 20:30:31TO HARD TO READ YOU KEEP JUMPING FROM ONE POINT OF VIEW TO ANOTHER SOME TIMES IN THE SAME SENTENCE AND YOU CAN’T SPELL FOR SHIT GET A GOOD EDITOR AND DO A REWRITE AND NEVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRSTFalconeroReport 2011-01-12 21:27:30It is a curious thing that your viewpoints are mismatched and scrambled, especially since you don’t seem to have this problem with your four other stories. Indian xxx hd 13 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2016-11-20 09:09:08Why dnt you finish the story you started in 2010FalconeroReport 2012-10-16 14:29:40Also, will there actually be a next part? You posted a new story a week ago after not writing anything for a year.Msterchief09Report 2011-04-07 20:46:56You switch between 3rd and 1st person all the time…kind of ruins itanonymous readerReport 2011-02-28 20:30:31TO HARD TO READ YOU KEEP JUMPING FROM ONE POINT OF VIEW TO ANOTHER SOME TIMES IN THE SAME SENTENCE AND YOU CAN’T SPELL FOR SHIT GET A GOOD EDITOR AND DO A REWRITE AND NEVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRSTFalconeroReport 2011-01-12 21:27:30It is a curious
