I picture what I’m reading in my head, like watching a movie in my mind. Indian XXX On a different note, however, You set this story up fairly decently. Other than what I stated above; your story flows very well and it has an excellent plot. Which was done well right in the beginning when you described your charecter in the closet. Other than what I stated above; your story flows very well and it has an excellent plot. The lack of descriptive adjectives makes it like watching a movie with plain grey people on a black background. Not to sound like a bitch, but; Your character description is highly lacking, your grammer is terrible and your over all your use of description is next to none. The lack of descriptive adjectives makes it like watching a movie with plain grey people on a black background. I picture what I’m reading in my head, like watching a movie in my mind. Which was done well right in the beginning when you described your charecter in the closet. The lack of descriptive adjectives makes it like watching a movie with plain grey people on a black background.
